tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31957501.post275894783381673710..comments2023-03-31T02:55:30.877-07:00Comments on little bit'a everything, whole lotta nuttin: wandererAedonTorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03294616386098983188noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31957501.post-59289184376441472562011-01-18T19:39:41.231-08:002011-01-18T19:39:41.231-08:00Nice. I like the mysteriousness of both the narra...Nice. I like the mysteriousness of both the narrator and the person mentioned and the use of things that aid that are the naming of specific things (Aithoran, Hiedoroth, etc.) which help in giving a sense of a bigger world. Definitely piques interest and desire to know more. Good hook, it's so open but gives the sense of being established.<br /><br />I like the idea of the "quest" being everlasting in the narrator's mind and yet renewed every day so that he continues regardless. I think this could be added to if it were elaborated that he would not actually throw himself down in the last paragraph, but perhaps you like it that way.<br /><br />I cannot think of many comments on structure at this time but I like it and this is more an independent style and flows nicely. Good work.Skiphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08862819298170600906noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-31957501.post-38850636353417847222011-01-12T23:00:01.918-08:002011-01-12T23:00:01.918-08:00That my favorite thing you've ever written? I ...That my favorite thing you've ever written? I think so. I feel like I say that often, but that was amazing. So many questions I want answers to. Such great imagery in my mind. A full saga in moments. Argh, nevermind, I don't think anything I'm typing is really conveying how much I like this or how it made me feel reading.The Venerable Monsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16952029036501299100noreply@blogger.com